Sunday, August 28, 2011

La Gargola - Forrest Guthrie

I was walking down the beach and ran into the security guard Armondo. The soft spoken native to Mexico was always eager to share his knowledge of the land and people with the white tourists. He started the topic of the night by telling us about his brother Raul. According to Armondo, Raul was about as honest as Abe Lincoln. At the end of all of Armondo’s stories he ended with, “If you dont believe me, ask my brother, he never lies”.

After about a half hour the sun began to slowly disappear. This is when Armondo’s story truly began. He started by asking us, “have you ever seen a gargoyle?” We laughed as we told him about the big marble gargoyles on the tops of buildings in America. He looked at us as if we were talking about the Virgin Mary as a comic book character. To him La Gargola was much more than a Myth. We later found out that 18 years earlier Armondo experienced something that gives him every reason to believe in such things.


The two brothers had been playing in the fields while their father was tending the crops. Just as the sun came down they saw a giant, unidentifiable, winged figure, soaring towards them. At first glance it seemed to be an enormous hawk. As it got closer it appeared to have the shape of a human body. They say they could get a clear glimpse of the face but what they did was the face of an abused dog, covered in scars and dirt. Armondo could only point at a large beach umbrella when trying to explain the size of this creatures wingspan. It swept down towards them, as if it were trying to snatch them for dinner. It ended knocking over Raul and leaving him with a scar that he still claims was given to him by La Gargola.


To this day Armondo still searches for La Gargola soaring through the moonlit Mexican skyline. He still scares the tourists and shares his stories with them. His family still warns their children of the dangers of being out alone at night. Some natives try to justify what the people claim to have seen, but to this day it is something that can not be proven. They say it was just a freakishly large bird, or that the only time you see it is under the influence. Yet, there are still hundreds of myths that people like Armondo continue to preach about. It is part of who they are and what they represent. It is embedded in their culture and will remain their until it is proven that gargoyles don’t exist.

22 comments:

  1. The part about seeing it under the influence, is not helping the "believable" side. The description of the face is very good and gives good imagery.

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  2. Your story was good! The fact the spirit was in dog form is believable because I just read a story about a mexican spirit that was in the form of a dog as well. It's also believable because I just listened to you tell this story outside as well. You did a good job describing everything!

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  3. I thought this story was short, sweet and to the point which was a refreshing change! Maybe you could add some more credibility in this story to make it a tad more believable. There are also a few grammatical errors but otherwise a very compelling story!

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  4. i really liked how your story was cultural. Your descriptions make the story come to life. I also like how this was written how a person would tell it.

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  5. You're a very good writer. The fact that you mentioned Raul's scar helps make it seem like it actually happened. The talk about the different culture makes us also consider if things like this could happen in other places.

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  6. Very good story. The emotion was there and you made it seem very credible. I also like how you started your story. It starts at the beginning of the story instead of explaining how you heard the story and throwing facts in to start it off. Once again, good job.

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  7. I really liked this story. Not many stories are about gargoyles and it was cool to read one. The cultural aspect helped the credibility of the story. The "under the influence" quote hurt it a little, but it still was a great story.

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  8. Great story! I enjoyed reading it. I never read a story about a gargoyles, but it gave me some chills. Your paragraphs flowed nicely. I wish you wouldn't of put "under the influence" because it hurts the credibilty. But overall, its a good story.

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  9. I agree the "under the influence" and your ending seemed to leave the reader thinking if the story is real. Other than that awesome story!

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  10. Your background was pretty definite, I could tell it was there very easily. I like that Armondo starts to spin his tale right as the sin goes down, that confirms his serious belief in La Gargola. The beach umbrella was a good reference because it also kept the setting gin mind and helped realism drastically. Good story =]

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  11. Even though armando said that his brother never lies, we cannot expect that to be true in itself. It was some guy on a beach telling a story about flying things. I would stress the fact that other people have claimed similar sightings perhaps. Try to boost armando's credibility somehow.

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  12. When i hear mexican stories, i always feel like its a way for the mexican families to make sure their kids dont go around doing dangerous things or else monsters will get them. This seems kind of the same way to me.

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  13. Very entertaining story, but I am not feeling the credibility in your piece. The fact that some guy told you the story in some beach in Mexico hurts your credibility. Even though at the you established some good arguments to fix this. Also, I am a Spanish native speaker, and I'm pretty sure you got the name wrong it might be Armando, maybe double check that, but again great story

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  14. Your sentence structure was clear and easy to follow making for a very nice read! My favorite part was the amount of detail you put into Armando as a character. All the detail you put into describing him really helped me not only believe that Armdando is a real person, but it established credibility for his story. Nice job sir!

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  15. the story is credible knowing that the spirit took a dog form. i have been told stories like this many times, the detailing of the events capyured me i like it

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  16. Good story! I like the cultural feel that the story has to it. The description of the gargoyle provides good imagery; I can picture its size and how it looks. Raul’s scar and the presence of a second witness helps substantiate the argument. However, it is a little unclear how you know Armondo. If you randomly met him at a beach in Mexico, then maybe you need to add more to his credibility.

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  17. I like the story but it could use more facts about how you know Armondo among other things in the story. The creditability of the story is kind of questionable do to the fact that they seen it while under the influence and that he told you the story while on a beach in Mexico.

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  18. Because this story was told to you on a beach in Mexico, it just seems like another Mexican folklore tale, which is so prominent in that culture. Although this story is undeniable supernatural, the fact that it came from a culture so full of myths downgrades its credibility a little. Credibility is also given though because this was told directly to you by the person it happened too. The scar that his brother received helped the credibility to the story because then the supernatural had actual consequences, versus just being spooked by a flying bird.

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  19. The description in your story was very good. I did see a couple grammatical errors such as "there" being spelled "their"so you should check it for any of those. Also I would probably just remove the part about being under the influence because it makes it seem like a less credible story because Raul could have just been under the influence.

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  20. Like Jordan said, the comment about it happening while "under the influence" made the story completely unbelievable to me. The story being passed down from multiple generations of "influenced" people who may have freaked out over nothing destroys any credibility you may have built up.

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  21. I really love this story And your describe of your background is very nice. I like it in the story. And maybe the phrase in your story can be used in my paper.

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  22. I liked how you started off right into the story and then incorporated the background from there. It captures the reader right away. The quote about Raul never lying helped the credibility of your story. When Raul claims that his scar it from La Gargola it is believable because you give the background that he is honest. Also, your story becomes more believable when you say that many people have seen things that could be it because it was not just one person.

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