Through out high school, I would frequently take naps either between classes or after school because of having to wake up so early. Around the time of April, I had a crazy experience I had never had before while trying to take a nap. As I was drifting off into sleep, I felt a pressure close around my head, as if someone were hugging my head. Because I was half asleep, at first I thought it was my boyfriend awkwardly hugging me while I was lying down, but then it started to feel more like I was being suffocated. Finally I remembered that I was alone in my bed, trying to take a nap. I realized that I wasn’t fully asleep, but was caught in the middle of being asleep and awake. My body was asleep but my mind was still awake. I was able to think normally, but I couldn’t move at all. Even using all my force and strength, I could not manage to lift my pinky finger up. My eyes were caught between being half closed to fully closed, so I could see some of my surroundings but everything was fairly blurry. I watched as my mom passed by my bedroom, and I tried to scream for help, but I couldn’t open my mouth, and no sound came out. At that point in time I felt and literally thought I was paralyzed.
After about 5 or so minutes, I did end up actually falling asleep, and a few hours later I woke up normally. The experience really scared me, so I decided to go online to see if anyone else had experienced anything like I had. When I looked online, I found numerous websites about people who had experienced what I had, which I found out was called sleep paralysis. As I continued to read other people’s experiences, I found out that it is fairly common, and the one I had experienced, was nothing compared to what other people had. Some had experienced sleep paralysis at a completely different level, where while their mind was still awake, and their body was asleep, what they saw was what they should have been seeing while they were dreaming. So basically it was like they were awake while they were dreaming, but could not move or scream for help at all. A lot of other people also had experienced lesser versions, like I had, and had felt that same pressure as they were caught in the sleep paralysis. I ended up doing some research and many different countries have stories to explain sleep paralysis. Some describe it as a demon that takes control of your body, or will sit on your chest, and some describe it as a witch riding on your back. Most of the stories involve the paralysis being caused by a dark presence in the room, but personally I consider all those explanations as folklores, but found them very interesting nonetheless. Since April, it has happened about 5 or so more times, each one a little different from the last, but now that I have a better idea of what it is, it does not frighten me as much, but I don’t necessarily look forward to it if it happens again either.
After about 5 or so minutes, I did end up actually falling asleep, and a few hours later I woke up normally. The experience really scared me, so I decided to go online to see if anyone else had experienced anything like I had. When I looked online, I found numerous websites about people who had experienced what I had, which I found out was called sleep paralysis. As I continued to read other people’s experiences, I found out that it is fairly common, and the one I had experienced, was nothing compared to what other people had. Some had experienced sleep paralysis at a completely different level, where while their mind was still awake, and their body was asleep, what they saw was what they should have been seeing while they were dreaming. So basically it was like they were awake while they were dreaming, but could not move or scream for help at all. A lot of other people also had experienced lesser versions, like I had, and had felt that same pressure as they were caught in the sleep paralysis. I ended up doing some research and many different countries have stories to explain sleep paralysis. Some describe it as a demon that takes control of your body, or will sit on your chest, and some describe it as a witch riding on your back. Most of the stories involve the paralysis being caused by a dark presence in the room, but personally I consider all those explanations as folklores, but found them very interesting nonetheless. Since April, it has happened about 5 or so more times, each one a little different from the last, but now that I have a better idea of what it is, it does not frighten me as much, but I don’t necessarily look forward to it if it happens again either.
I think it was a very good idea to put in how you researched what happened to you. It shows that many more people have the same things happening to them. It makes it more believable. The detail in the first paragraph really makes the reader feel the fear you felt when it happened to you.
ReplyDeleteWow, i can't believe that happened to you! I would be pretty scared too! The way you described your experience made it seem so real. Your word choice and detail really made the story come to life. It was also interesting hearing about how you researched it to find out what had happened to you and other experiences people had had with the same thing as well as finding explanations for it. You made it a very believable and real story.
ReplyDeleteFor me this is really hard to believe, maybe because its never happend to me or just because I havent heard about Sleep Paralysis before. I think its a really interesting topic to look at. The way you presented your "experience" really made me believe you, and also the research part really lifted up your credibility, even though it was written in 1st person which could hurt it too.
ReplyDeleteThis story reminds me of an out of body experience dream I once had, so I can relate. The story does seem very real and believable in my opinion. In the second paragraph, you used some facts from the internet to help back up why this experience you had actually happened, which gives it plenty of credibility. In the first paragraph, I felt as if I were in your shoes. Well written.
ReplyDeleteThis story to me is truly frightening because it sounds like such a scary thing to happen while your asleep! You established a great emotional connection with me and I'm really sorry that you have to go through that. I would just suggest not using the internet for your credability because it is not always reliable. Maybe find a specific, credible internet source and relay a story off of it. Otherwise a very compelling story!
ReplyDeleteThe story is definitely a bit frightening, and the fear adds a lot to your story. The internet research boosts and harms your credibility. It's good you did the research but not knowing which sources you used damages the credibility of the story a bit since the readers don't know if you had good sources. Overall, it was a good and really brought readers into your situation.
ReplyDeleteThis has happened to me too! I was awake, but I couldn’t move or talk at all. It was the reason I couldn’t go see The Dark Knight with my friends, they didn’t wait up for me so I was just left to “sleep”. You did a good job writing the beginning of the story, making sure the reader could feel your terror. Your word choice was good, and because of it the story was more emotional. The fact that you yourself experienced this also makes it more believable. The ending of the story where you included the research about the paralysis further added credibility to the story as well.
ReplyDeleteTo be honest your conclusion caught me off guard! How and why are you ready for this to happen again? Actually researching what happened to you makes me really believe you. Great story but creepy!
ReplyDeleteI really like this story. In the beginning you could swap some less descriptive words out for some better ones though to grasp the readers attention. I found your experience terrifying at first but it could have been even worse with vivid description. I liked how the mood completely changes too its like you have a sense of ease when you figure out its sleep paralysis.
ReplyDeleteThe research you did helps your case in many ways. Other people in other locations have experienced the same thing and that raises your credibility. Use this as the driving force behind your analysis.
ReplyDeleteYour story pulled me in and kept me reading. I think it's scary because it's something that could happen to any of us. It's also credible because you went and found some information on the background of what you experienced. Nicely done.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! Your story drew me in and I couldn't stop reading. You have a lot of credibility because I have heard of others having the same thing. You also have the emotion when explaining when you were in sleep paralysis. Once again, great story.
ReplyDeleteGreat story! It drew me in as a reader and it was credible because you had facts to back up why you went through this and what the demon was.
ReplyDeleteI’ve never had this happen to me, but I’ve had a lot of friends that have experienced sleep paralysis. Growing up, my parents always said it was a spirit sitting on you, so I liked how you added the cultural interpretations in your last paragraph. The research helps the credibility. The story also had good imagery. I could picture exactly how you were feeling and what you saw.
ReplyDeletegood story, the details are there and the way you capture the reader from the start is good. i think it credible because i have experienced something in that genre but not quite the same like you
ReplyDeleteThis story was interesting and I liked it. It would be really creepy if this would've happened to me. This happening to you definitely helps the credibility of the story. Backing up the story up with facts helped the realism of the story also.
ReplyDeleteThis is a very entertaining story. It is very credible to me because i believe that something similar to this happened to me when I was much younger and I still remember it today, although it may have just been a dream. It made it more credible that you provided information about how you looked online and then told about what others had experienced. It was also very detailed which made it more credible as well.
ReplyDeleteThe fact that you looked up the condition and found multiple accounts of sleep paralysis helped establish the credibility of your story! had i not heard of the condition before, reading this would inform me of most of what i needed to know! nice job tying it all together, i enjoyed reading it!
ReplyDeleteI like the fact that you had done research on the subject of your story adds a great deal of creditability to your so the reader can believe it is real. The flow of writing makes it easy to follow what is going on in the story. I also like how u added a cultural element to the story as well
ReplyDeleteSleep stories are somthing i can relate. Sleep has given me some of the craziest experiences in life so reading about yours is interesting. It was very credible and made me comfortable believeing it. you did a good job of relating everything. Great Job!
ReplyDeleteAlways very interesting. Sleep paralysis is an awkward thing and is indeed very scary. Anyone who has experienced it knows that this is true. I have even had it happen to me while i was standing up before.
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