Only a few days into my stay at Campus Village, I experienced something out of the ordinary. It was my first week at Campus Village; I was walking around the place, checking everything out since I was going to be living there for the next few months. It was late at night as I started walking down a long hallway towards my room when I saw something at the end of the hall. I couldn’t quite make out what it was. It wasn’t a person, but some sort of shadow. It didn’t move or anything, it was completely still. All of a sudden it disappeared.
I was a little freaked out about what just happened. It was late at night and I was all alone in a very long and silent hallway. There was an eerie feeling in that hallway. I hurried back into my dorm. As I went to bed, I was very paranoid; I had no clue what I saw. “What was it”, I kept asking myself,” a ghost, a spirit, or something else?” I ended up deciding that it was just my imagination and that nothing else happened. I didn’t want to keep thinking about it.
A few days later, I was walking with some friends down the same hallway when the same shadow appeared again. I quickly asked my friends if they could see the shadow too. The weird thing was that none of them of could. Then the shadow moved and again I asked my friends if they saw it and still nothing. They asked if something was wrong with me and I could not give an answer to them. I had no clue why I could see something that my friends right next to me couldn’t. It really puzzled me for a while. I asked around and no one had an answer for me.
There is no explanation for the shadow and why I was the only one to see it. Maybe it was just my imagination, that I am just seeing things that aren’t real. It would explain why I was the only one to see, it was all in my head, or was it something else. Could it have been a supernatural being of some sort? The shadow could have been some spirit of some kind, but only directed towards me, the reason why I could only see it. It may have been even something else, but there is still no reason or explanation for the shadow and why I could only see it.
I think this story is good because, a lot of the readers can probably relate to it; the part of you living in Campus Village. A lot of people also are the only ones who can see things. Maybe it is just our minds that put things there to either scare us or comfort us?
ReplyDeleteThis is a good story and creeps me out because I live in Campus Village. It's also creepy because an earlier story talked about how they didn't want their "ghost" or supernatural being to follow them when they moved into Campus Village. It was well written, good job.
ReplyDeleteThe fact that this was in Campus Village made your story very credible to the audience because many of us live there. I also like the fact that you leave your story open ended and up to the reader to decide whether they believe it or not. It think you could even shorten this story a little bit if you wanted to.
ReplyDeleteYour story taking place in Campus Village makes it relatable and credible because so many people live there and can visually see what you are talking about. I like how you don't have any ideas as to what this was or why this happened, it makes it all the more real.
ReplyDeleteObviously we living in the dorms will relate, but the fact that those with you could not see it would commonly make someone think that it may not be true, however, it made me feel like believing you because if i was with you and you saw it, I would be able to accept that I can not.
ReplyDeleteThe story flows very well. It's got good detail in it to make it sound real, and like everyone else said, sounds credible since it happened in a hallway in campus village. When I see someone tell a story about a figure at the end of a hallway, it makes me think of common ghost stories you hear, which makes me want to believe it.
ReplyDeleteGood story. As everyone else said, it is very relatable because a majority of us also live at Campus Village. Because of that, the emotion was there and probably made some of us wonder if there are ghosts or spirits around these hallways. Your credibility is also strong because you encountered it yourself a few weeks ago. Once again, great job.
ReplyDeleteWow this story creeped me out, because I was suppose to stay in campus village. I never thought that they had "shadows" lurking around there. This story is very credible, and you gave a lot of descriptive detail as to how you felt, and what you seen. I loved it , nice job!
ReplyDeleteVery creepy! The fact that your story is short and right to the point scared me! But it seems that its still a mystery and that affects the credibility.
ReplyDeleteCredibility is good due to resent exposure. The location is not is some foreign land so many can relate. I found myself doubting this story a bit, because it could have been your imagination, it could have been another person's shadow, something's shadow from the outside. I don't mean to be a Debbie downer or rude about your story, I just found myself speculating the experience.
ReplyDeleteIts funky to think that the dorms are haunted, but its something that im sure a lot of people feel the same way sometimes. Being alone can always cause you to be freaked out especially in a foreign place. maybe its just nerves or something. Obviously i find myself questioning how true a ghost could be. Maybe your experience just isnt enough.
ReplyDeleteThe fact you establish a realistic setting and place gives it more credibility. Again personal experience is a plus to these kinds of stories. Also you ended the story in a great way, by giving us an option whether to believe it or not, and that there was no real explanation to what happened to you.
ReplyDeletePersonally having visited the dorms before and finding them creepy, i find the flourescent lighted hallway setting to be fitting. The fact that only you saw the shadow left my on the fence about whether it was your imagination o if it really was the supernatural which left me guessing. nice story!
ReplyDeletethe usage of campus village in your story makes it very credible knowing that we all know its location but i have seen the dorms and i think they are pretty boring so if you say you seen something creepy you might have your imagination playing tricks on you. in overall great story and its good that you leave the audience with unanswered questions
ReplyDeleteI think that it is easy for a reader to relate to your story because it’s human nature to blame it on our imagination or say it’s nothing when it’s “strange” or outside of what we consider normal. There is definitely a strong emotional appeal from this respect. To target a larger audience, you can consider adding more detail about Campus Village. A description of the setting can make the story more relatable if people don’t know anything about this place.
ReplyDeleteI like your story because you write it to the point you don't lolly gag around with a lot of details. I also like the fact that anyone that lives in campus village could relate to the story but the only downside to that is those who don't live there can’t relate to the story as well as someone who does. Overall the story is pretty good and well written.
ReplyDeleteThis story got me thinking. I do not know what to believe, because as you said it could just be in your head. This aspect of the story is so different than the other stories because it is not trying to convince us that there was a ghost, or a spirit or something else supernatural, it just gets the reader thinking about the existence of the paranormal. In that aspect, it was well written because the reader didn’t have to believe anything. A lot of readers can relate to you because a lot of us have been up to the dorms and know what they are like. Familiarity is a strong emotional appeal.
ReplyDeleteI really like the fact that this takes place at campus village because many of the readers live there and the rest at least are at school on an almost daily basis. There were a couple grammatical errors such as when you used the word "of" more than it needed to be, but I thought this was well written.
ReplyDeleteLiving at Campus Village myself and knowing how the hallways can sometimes be creepy in dorms added some credibility to the story for me. Your introduction is a little repetitive in the beginning when you say it was your first few days then say it was your first week. Other than a few grammar mistakes, it wasn't bad.
ReplyDeleteMan this makes me wanna stay on my mac and not leave my room tonight. I can relate to the creepy vibe the bright halls have here.Very well written. You didnt seem like you were trying too hard to convince us of what it was, you just told us your encounter. Now everytime im in the halls im gonna be on the lookout.
ReplyDeleteThe story happened in the campus vallage so make it very credibility. But the detail of your story should be more.
ReplyDeleteThis story really freaks me out because I also live in campus village. Not only that but I have also had weird experiences there. I was walking with a friend when we heard footsteps, we both turned around and saw nothing. It was so weird so I can relate to your story! Mentioning that you have seen it more than once also makes it more believable.
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